Horror: STORY 1

I’m sorry I cant start the story as writers usually do. The problem is that this story contains a SECRET. I will tell you the story, but I won’t use the characters ACTUAL name. I will use different names so it wont crack the person’s identity: so instead of the actual name, I will use a different name. Or, you can use YOUR names! For example if I was to say this took place in a school, you can make that school YOUR school or you can give the characters the names that YOU want. Simple right? Let me say again that the characters name or the place isn’t the REAL name.

Hmm, thinking of a name is harder than I thought. How about I call this character…Jenny! Jenny is a 12 year old girl, and she has the most biggest ears (if you’re about to say I just described the character, Jenny always covers her ears with her long black hair. So its a 99% chance you wont see her ears). Jenny ALWAYS orders pizza on the 4th of July: Pineapple pizza, Margarita, tomato pizza(no cheese), cheese burger pizza and so many others. But, this time, she thought she would get something different. She looked in the phone book with Max-Ernest and found a restaurant called ‘Ed’s Easy Diner’. Max-Ernest picked up the phone and started dialing.

After ten minutes or so, the delivery came. The money was paid and the food started to be eaten. Jenny looked out the window and saw the man who gave her the delivery…he looked suspicious. As she ate her burger, the man saw her staring at him. He opened his car door and took out…a bag of crisps?” I always eat my crisps when someone eats a burger!” she shouted out to Jenny. A little giggle came out of her mouth. They were talking for a bit until Jenny came outside. The two of them started being friends

A week passed, so Jenny and the delivery man, who’s fake name Ethan, were practically best friends. Max-Ernest always warns Jenny about Ethan but all she says is that he’s jealous that she has a best friend.

One night, Ethan rings Jenny and tells her that they have a huge party at the restaurant and that he will come pick her up at 8:30. Hours passed. It was 8:30. The door bell rang,  Jenny flew down the stairs to open the door. “Jen! Come on lets go!” examined Ethan from the mail hole. As she opened the door she said “Coming Eth,” she turned the door knob, “just give me a second!” All that was heard was after she opened the door was the sound of someone using their nails down a chalk board.

It was unknown what happened but Jenny was never found again. Oh yeah, and Max-Ernest is in a coma somehow.

Never trust strangers.

One thought on “Horror: STORY 1

  1. jruddy

    Hi Denise,
    Firstly, well done for posting a great story. I get frightened by horror stories so this was difficult to read. Well done for having a good beginning, middle part and ending. The paragraphs made sense. The level of detail you gave was excellent – you really described the characters and surroundings well which brought your story to life really well.
    The ending was so tragic though. Did Ethan get rid of her then? What happened? Why did he do it? You created all these questions in my mind which is great.
    Just a couple of things. Don’t forget your apostrophes – e.g. let’s and can’t and character’s to show it belongs.
    Keep writing. I’ll look forward to the next one – as long as the ending isn’t so horrific!
    Mr. Ruddy


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