A story about a poppy

It was a lovely sunny day  my friends and I were playing in the park . My friend John found a red flower he had no idea what it was. He called us over to have a look it was a poppy. I told him they grew in world war 1. “Now I remember” he said. I told him In two day It would be 100 years since world war 1. Really he said I never knew that.  ” wow I can’t wait for it to be Friday  it will be great.  We all went to Luke’s house.  Luke said his mums dad was in world war 1 ” wow” we all said.

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  1. 100wc6

    Hi Ryan,
    Thanks for sharing your writing. I like how you included some facts in your writing, like that it’s the 100th anniversary of the start of WW1. Watch out for punctuation. Your writing could use some full stops (periods) and commas to help pace the reader. For example, instead of “He called us over to have a look it was a poppy” it should be “He called us over to have a look. It was a poppy.” Keep up the writing!
    Mr. Fischer (Team 100; Canada)

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