WHAT IS THAT?

I crept out of my flat and started to run because I had that horrifying feeling  you get when you are being watched! I raced to Max’s door, I couldn’t take the presser of being watched. I was about to ring the door bell I couldn’t believe the smell coming from Max’s front garden. It was so cute but I didn’t touch it because I didn’t know what it was. Then I knocked on the door and Max said “EEEEHHHHHH WHAT IS THAT?” I said “I do not have a clue.”I ran all the way home but I was locked out.

2 thoughts on “WHAT IS THAT?

  1. jacqueline grima (Team 100)

    Hi Kian, this is a very exciting story and I love your use of interesting vocab like ‘horrifying’, that’s a fantastic word! To improve it, perhaps you could have given the reader a bit more of a clue as to what you found in the garden and, next time, don’t forget to check your spelling before you post (pressure). Keep up the good work!

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  2. 15tajay

    Hi kian,
    I really enjoyed your story especially the part when you ran home and found out you were locked out. I wasn’t quite sure about what genre it was but still a very good story. Right, now comes my wish, I don’t think I couldn’t believe the smell really goes with your story or in that part. But anyway, keep up the good work, and keep doing the 100 word challenge.

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